Not having sexOur pal Freddie Woo says: Climbing into the back seat of the car, she sat on a fortnight-old bag of food shopping I had completely forgotten about. The stench of a bag of bean sprouts popping open is a real passion-killer, I can tell you for nothing. Tell us about the shag you didn't have because you blew it.
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Scaryduck LIKES EGG, Thu 22 May 2014, 14:01)
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Clicked.But, you really need to flesh out the back-story. Really build it up so as to increase the anticipation and expectation of what is inevitably sure to come.
Then, just as the reader is about to walk away in disgust - BAM!
Right in the pisser!
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