As there has been a good deal of 'erotic' writing posted
I thought I'd stick some of my own in....

This isn't as hardcore as others have been and it's not as graphic as the erotica I posted some time ago....

Instead it's a bit of Literary Erotica ... well, I'd like to think it is...but I'm inclined to think it's just pretentious tosh...however, it is part of a novel I've written which is still sitting in its virtual drawer as a first draft. Maybe one day I'll get it out, redraft it and send it around to publishers to be rejected properly.

For now, all you lovely people can read it...
( chickenlady b3ta's very own Elizabeth Taylor, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 17:18, 15 replies, latest was 10 years ago)

Untitled.
I slip beneath the cool cotton sheet, skin still slightly damp from the bath.

The warm contented sigh of the breeze from the open window above my bed, lifts the cotton sheet and I smell lavender.

Arms spread wide, fingertips running along the smooth cotton and the mellow air caressing my skin.

The gentle gusts from the window feel like His breath on my face as I turn my head towards Him and the pillow His hand on my cheek.

I feel Him sliding into bed next to me and feverish heat engulfs me.

I keep my eyes closed.

Running my hands through my hair the delicious knot of tension in the pit of my stomach builds.

My hands are no longer my own, my left I run down the length of my side, trailing fingernails gently along my skin, gentle pressure from His hands: His climbers hands that seek out the new terrain of my body, testing, teasing.

The other hand traces small circles on my breast with fingertips barely touching.

I bite my lip and my hips rise slightly, sending the wordless request to Him, wanting Him to explore further.

I feel His hot breath on my neck and I know if I were to open my eyes right now He would look into my eyes and see what I need from Him, He would see who I truly am.

My limbs feel heavy, languid, fluid - I am water on rock, hurling myself against Him, unable to do or be anything more than I am – tidal controlled by the moon, pulled by the current, pulled onto Him, crashing again and again against Him.

A hand is dragged down, pulled by the strengthening swell.

Fingertips find the smooth warm dampness which rolls in as the next wave breaks over the rocks.

Fingers dipping and swirling, pressing harder, deeper, back arching in response.

Breathing now shorter, beads of saltwater sweat begin to run in rivulets along my collarbone, the warm breeze now a misty fret enveloping me.

Shuddering waves wash over me again and again until I am lifted higher and higher onto the peak and I am soaring.

I am released.

I roll over, body pressed down into the bed, my fingers I slowly suck as the peace spreads though me.

Each inch of flesh tingles as the cotton caresses it, hip bones teased, thighs tickled.

I lift my feet behind me, cross them at the ankles, hands cup my chin and elbows sink into the pillow.

Now He would lean across me, run His hand gently over my shoulders, sweeping them down to the curve of my arse where He would pause, waiting to hear my breath shorten again.

Then He would slide over me, kneel between my parted legs, lift the hair at my neck, lean in and kiss me there gently before gripping my hips, raising me slightly and then plunging Himself into me, taking what is His.




My body aches and aches – empty salt water, the tide carries nothing upon it, no foam from which Venus is born, the current pulls me yet it cannot drown me for He is not here.

I turn onto my back again, throw the sheet off my sweating body and I lie still, saltwater pooling in my ears.

I watch the stars grow brighter in the dark sky until they slowly start to fade as the morning sky turns from a deep bruised mauve to gentle lavender.
( chickenlady b3ta's very own Elizabeth Taylor, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 17:21, Reply)

....and this, is how it should be done.
*clicks*

*applauds*
( Bert Monkeysex is waiting for the mods to delete him, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 17:23, Reply)

*Blushes*

Ta.
( chickenlady b3ta's very own Elizabeth Taylor, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 17:24, Reply)

Ah...
and there goes the next half hour or so.
That was lovely...

If I was being extra picky I'd suggest changing "arse" to a gentler word to more fit the tone of the piece, but that might be just too much pretentious nonsense.
( DukeEuphoria Comes highly reccomended, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 17:34, Reply)

@ Duke
I agree...arse does rather clang against the general tone of the piece...but I can't come up with anything else at the moment...it may be that in the rewrites it gets taken out altogether. Originally I had ass because it sounds gentler and less coarse...but it still doesn't really work.

:/
( chickenlady b3ta's very own Elizabeth Taylor, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 17:37, Reply)

RRRRrrrRRRRR!!
and indeed, RRRRRrrrRRRRR!
( crackhouseceilidhband Fuck off back to Mumsnet, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 17:38, Reply)

.
Brilliant use of metaphors! I especially like how the sea-based metaphors are chained together. I think the excellent quality of the writing distracts a bit from the eroticness, but I like it.
( mistaspakkaman and the inedible shifting caterpillars, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 17:46, Reply)

Oh goody, slashfic.

( Amorous Badger NAKED BEA ARTHUR PHOTOS 4U, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 17:55, Reply)

Where you getting
done by God?
( Kroney, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 18:05, Reply)

You're so good at this Chickenlady
It's erotic because it's subtle.
( Boss Keloid Got your mother's maiden name tattooed on my arm, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 18:26, Reply)

This is hot
hot hot hot
( fuck shit up the best you never had, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 20:24, Reply)

Hmmmm!
It's made me go all wibbly.
( girlinthehole, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 21:28, Reply)

No Kroney
It's about masturbation.
( chickenlady b3ta's very own Elizabeth Taylor, Tue 8 Jul 2008, 21:30, Reply)

Hey!
Great to read this again Chick! Took me back to last year: sitting in the pub at lunchtime with the latest pages hot (and sticky) off the printer - pint of Centurian's Ghost at my elbow - cruel red pen in my fevered grip.

Stands the test of time very well. Right about 'arse' though...hmmm...is 'bum' any better?
(Che Grimsdale Best before:, Thu 10 Jul 2008, 13:36, Reply)

:(

(I helped save b3ta! Frisbee, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 10:55, closed)
No thread of note would be complete without

(I helped save b3ta! Battered I am not inviting you, fucko, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 10:44, closed)
Woo, we got the mods seal of approval!
Seriously though can someone link me to the bullying that caused this.
(I helped save b3ta! mike woz ere 7442200 & 7696970 getter, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 10:46, closed)
pls, i missed all this as i'm banned from this nonce section of the site

(mongychops, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 10:50, closed)

I guess it's www.b3ta.com/questions/celebencounters3/post2165735
(I helped save b3ta! Munsta, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 10:51, closed)
but that was 2 days ago.
unless I've underestimated s0ckpuppets autistic determination, he'd have had to have worked ROUND THE CLOCK to dox everyone who's ever wronged him.
(I helped save b3ta! mike woz ere 7442200 & 7696970 getter, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 10:55, closed)
incoming trips

(mongychops, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 10:56, closed)
This is ace.
Qotw is amusing for a change.
(Paddington Pookie best of all the bears. saw a rug chewer in the wild on, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 10:51, closed)
I hope this one wins

(I helped save b3ta! mike woz ere 7442200 & 7696970 getter, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 10:55, closed)
Good point
*clicks*
(The Magic Number is neither magic nor a number, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 10:56, closed)
*click*

(Paddington Pookie best of all the bears. saw a rug chewer in the wild on, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:02, closed)
Good grief. You're not right.

(I helped save b3ta! That Spesh ul Time Of Year, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:08, closed)
Since I've been denied the right of reply to what the mods have to say.

Threatening to out people to their clients and employers is morally so out there, we're frankly worried for you s0ckpuppet.
No more so than [incorrectly] talking about how my wife has cuckolded me, and let's not forget the repeated slurs against me, using my real name. How about rory and AB talking about abusing my daughter while I cried into my pot noodles.

Too fucking late guys.

Mod edit: for which they were stepped.


The only reason this ban isn't immediately permament is that you've been goaded relentlessly by others.
Where were you then when that was happening?

Mod edit: stepping the ones that crossed the line, ignoring the ones that didn't. You don't get to make the decisions just like 'they' don't get to decide who gets banned.

(Misery McUglywife an attention seeking sociopathic fuckstain., Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:10, closed)
Jesus, just give up you weird prick.

(I helped save b3ta! mike woz ere 7442200 & 7696970 getter, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:12, closed)
another ban incoming you retard, either man up and do it, or fuck off and stop wasting everybodies time

(mongychops, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:13, closed)
It's like watching a sculptor, mongy.
I hope you make your masterpiece.
(I helped save b3ta! mike woz ere 7442200 & 7696970 getter, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:14, closed)
this one aint got the minerals to do it mike, i susspect this is all lies, if he had the names and info he would post them, out the bullies like he was outed

(mongychops, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:18, closed)
You could just try suing them for libel/slander.
Instead of taking a moronic approach that also leaves you open to libel/slander (and also harassment).
(BombayMick seltoe and wine, Tabs singing Christian Rhyme, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:13, closed)
Is it a crime to be *too* spastic?

(I helped save b3ta! mike woz ere 7442200 & 7696970 getter, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:15, closed)
I thought it was an achievement on XBox One?
Unlocked when you purchased it and signed in for the first time.
(BombayMick seltoe and wine, Tabs singing Christian Rhyme, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:19, closed)
Edgy

(The Magic Number is neither magic nor a number, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:21, closed)
^This is starting to get intersting...
interesting properly fucked up
(The Magic Number is neither magic nor a number, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:13, closed)
funny though

(I helped save b3ta! Manger Turd, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:47, closed)
or both.

(I helped save b3ta! That Spesh ul Time Of Year, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:57, closed)
did any of this get you sacked?

(I helped save b3ta! Moon Girl Technologies don't take my word for anything, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:14, closed)
Let's take this as the cry for help it so blatantly is

(I helped save b3ta! The Grrrinch had fun once. It was awful., Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:14, closed)
OK, you really do need to switch off your internet devices and get outside more.

(I helped save b3ta! The Hedgehog From Hell sweeping statement, link to unreliable website, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:16, closed)
At least he can't hurt anyone on the internet
If that gets switched off he'll have to go outside for attention
(I helped save b3ta! tangledupinyule dancing about architecture, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:23, closed)
Perhaps you should go and have a lie down for a bit eh?

(I helped save b3ta! Battered I am not inviting you, fucko, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:19, closed)
sick dubs
checked em
(I helped save b3ta! mike woz ere 7442200 & 7696970 getter, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:20, closed)
wizard i reckon

(mongychops, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:24, closed)
your local police and news station are going to be VERY confused
when all they have to work with is a tear-stained note, written on ham, that says 'THE MODS ON THE INTERNET WOULDN'T HELP ME I HAD TO DO THIS BADGER AND BRAYNDEDD ARE BULLIES'.

still, do carry on. this is gold.
(I helped save b3ta! janet aylia living la vida loony, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:25, closed)
are you fat over here now?

(I helped save b3ta! mike woz ere 7442200 & 7696970 getter, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:28, closed)
her fatness crosses all forms and forums

(mongychops, Thu 12 Dec 2013, 11:29, closed)
cascading dreamily in a hypnotic blaze
like a pair of flaming dice
(I helpe
( Fucking hell Jeff I am not a robot, Fri 13 Dec 2013, 20:23, Reply)