if you want some constructive feedback I'd say
you really nailed the grime mc part. it seemed authentic.
having done that, the content seemed a bit tame. yes grime mcs are a bit sexist and your virtue signalling might win a few "right ons" from PCish people, but I'd have liked you to be a bit braver than just illustrate why you're better than them. put a twist in or some anger or something that suggests theres parts grime you envy. it just seems a bit of wasted opportunity given how well you mimic them
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cumquat may will not be commenting further on the allegations, Thu 23 Feb 2017, 7:48,
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Cheers for you're feedback!
Well I guess I don't think I'm better than them. I envy their freedom I guess, this is about how there are some options I refuse to consider that others use as routine, without caring for consequences.
I'm not brave enough to go fully honest with people. A lot of my stuff is me attacking high status men. I've written about Kanye West, Simon Cowell, Trump, Jeremy Kyle. In a world where trump is president and farage is on fox, and the sun has headlines about drug dealers pleading for leniency because he's got 27 kids to support, I am not better than the alpha males I'm attacking all the time, in the long game I'm losing out. Fact is that Genghis Khan, Alexander the Great, the Pharoahs proved it is possible for a single man to become very successful by combining brutal and ruthless behaviour. I envy the fearlessness they show, I envy taking pride in cruelty as well then I guess where I feel shame at memories of loosing my temper instead of glory.
I'll write some more Its only a short song and its new, I can swap verses in and out at my upcoming shows.
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William MakesBeer poetman.co.uk, Thu 23 Feb 2017, 14:16,
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